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Come Quick







Come quick
I am bursting at the seams
and cannot contain
my own existence.

Please hold me
Yes, there is the mess
of all my salty liquids
and the bitterness
of my regrets,

but also
this still sunlight
that's too much
for my eyes and skin alone,

the light touch
of this insect on my arm,

this sound
from everywhere
like bells, like heaven.


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asakiyume
Sep. 16th, 2015 01:34 pm (UTC)
:-)
heliopausa
Sep. 16th, 2015 01:39 pm (UTC)
I like this very much!
asakiyume
Sep. 16th, 2015 01:42 pm (UTC)
very glad!
xjenavivex
Sep. 16th, 2015 01:58 pm (UTC)
Perhaps evening
Comes to wrap
You in soft solace
asakiyume
Sep. 16th, 2015 02:46 pm (UTC)
rest my eyes
against your soft side,
nighttime
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purplefigtree
Sep. 16th, 2015 02:12 pm (UTC)

You expressed that beautifully.

asakiyume
Sep. 16th, 2015 02:48 pm (UTC)
Thanks--it's that feeling of overbrimming, of gasping at what life, in that one instant, is.
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sovay
Sep. 16th, 2015 03:56 pm (UTC)
but also
this still sunlight
that's too much
for my eyes and skin alone,


This is wonderful.
asakiyume
Sep. 17th, 2015 01:49 am (UTC)
I'm really, really glad you think so.
sealwhiskers
Sep. 16th, 2015 04:13 pm (UTC)
Very nice!
asakiyume
Sep. 17th, 2015 01:49 am (UTC)
Thank you.
amaebi
Sep. 16th, 2015 06:21 pm (UTC)
I like that tremendously-- though smart_ted says that, for her as a person, not as a critiquer, there are two many bodily fluids.
asakiyume
Sep. 17th, 2015 01:51 am (UTC)
Haha! I read this wrong the first time and thought that smart_ted had only two bodily fluids, and I was wondering what the two were!
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egg_shell
Sep. 16th, 2015 07:01 pm (UTC)
Love it! Come quick!
asakiyume
Sep. 17th, 2015 01:51 am (UTC)
Come quick!

here with you!
oiktirmos
Sep. 16th, 2015 08:35 pm (UTC)
Beautiful poem.
As one of your neighbors said, (not to diminish your poem at all,)
I could scarcely refrain from leaping with transports of joy.
asakiyume
Sep. 17th, 2015 01:52 am (UTC)
I like that I have neighbors who said such things :-)
sartorias
Sep. 16th, 2015 10:16 pm (UTC)
Oh, that is quite lovely!

Especially that last stanza.
asakiyume
Sep. 17th, 2015 01:56 am (UTC)
Really happy that you like it.
seajules
Sep. 17th, 2015 01:06 am (UTC)
Oh, yes. That is glorious.
asakiyume
Sep. 17th, 2015 01:57 am (UTC)
Thanks for reading, seajules
scallywag195
Sep. 17th, 2015 03:39 am (UTC)
The images are very vivid. Thanks for sharing.
asakiyume
Sep. 17th, 2015 11:20 am (UTC)
Thank *you* for reading--I appreciate it.
khiemtran
Sep. 17th, 2015 08:43 am (UTC)
Lovely!
asakiyume
Sep. 17th, 2015 11:20 am (UTC)
Thank you--it's great to have readers!
syomsong
Oct. 14th, 2015 07:45 pm (UTC)
Thank you, dear.
asakiyume
Oct. 14th, 2015 08:50 pm (UTC)
Thank you, for being here, for reading.
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